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 The Forever Lives: Peace
Posted: Jul 8 2007, 04:09 AM

Magic Acadamy Pupil

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Joined: 29-December 05

This is a new project I'm undertaking. All of this is subject to change, and is not complete in any way.

Anyway, here's the first part of chapter one. I would appreciate it if you could point out any grammatical mistakes, spelling errors, continuity problems, or good ideas you have about it.

"No! Yura! Get back!" Ivan's eyes grew wide. He could not believe it. Yura, her face frozen, stunned, watched the blade protruding from her chest extend further and further. Ivan could see it; Yura's eyes, they were full of one emotion: fear. He couldn't bear it. He turned away as the blade withdrew, leaving her broken body to fall to the ground with a sickening splat.

"No, not again....." He was shivering, not from the cold, but from seeing her die. To his horror, he saw Sayuri reach an equally gruesome death. He had turned away from one nightmare, only to move on to the next. Her body lay mutilated at his feet, torn apart and made unrecognizable from the 78xs cannon. A tear fell from his eye.

He knew what was coming next. Even as explosions began to ripple through the Earth, even as countless soldiers gave their lives to a cause that seemed hopeless, even as the world shuddered from the battle that scarred it's surface, he stopped, and turned to Shawn to watch. Even now, he was shaken by what he saw.

Shawn had just destroyed a HAWCEn, and was cheering, giving out a battle cry at the impossible feat. He looked to the left, and the smile left his face. To Ivan, it appeared as though Shawn was moving in slow motion as his face filled with horror. From the corner of his eye, Shawn saw Sayuri's body. Before Shawn could even change his expression to match the shock and sadness, Ivan saw it happen again. A bright light appeared at Shawn's back. It slowly engulfed him, causing pain and agony wherever it touched him. Ivan knew it would reach him in less than a blink of the eye.

"What a shame," Ivan thought. He couldn't think of a way to save them all. His last sight would be watching his older brother slowly be ripped apart, piece by piece, atom by atom, and be reduced into raw materials for the enemy he had fought so hard against. Ivan chuckled, even at the thought at his own demise.

"I'm sorry, I couldn't protect you all yet again...Please, forgive me...." An old memory floated to the top of his mind; the one where they had last all been together, happy, at the place where they had first met.

He smiled, and held on to the memory as long as he could. The light engulfed him, and swiftly tore him apart. The pain was excrutiating. Ivan knew that the process only took a few milliseconds, but it felt like years. After an eternity, the light faded, the pain disappeared, and a lone tear fell from a few feet up to the ground, where Ivan had stood moments before. The battle raged, but for the group closer than family, it had ended. The objective was not fulfilled. The story was unfinished. It would never be. Their lives were cut short. They were gone, forever...

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