Update and Feedback

[Vash]

I'll use this topic for updating the story (and my side stories), and for any feedback from anyone.

[Jake Delfeir]

Well, I'll start by saying that it's looking to be a good and interesting story. And it's nice to know that you're taking my grammar nazi tendencies to heart by writing at a good level with hardly any mistakes. I could find them for you if you'd like, though I might wait for a few chapters first before doing them all at once.

I don't have any real problems with the story, though my own personal tendency is to write longer chapters. On a piece of paper in the real world, your chapter might be one of them. So that's only have about two or three pages in a book per chapter. I don't know if you want this to be published or not, but I just thought I'd point that out. Shorter chapters are good too, since they're not quite so demanding on your time.

Anyway, good start, and I eagerly await the next parts.

[Vash]

Well, actually I've been trying to make this a graphic novel, not a regular novel...so that's why I haven't been making the chapters that long. And another reason why I said there would be artwork in my forum for the story.

If you still want to check for error (I know you too well that you want to... ), you can just PM whenever you get the chance.

[Blue Dragon-sy]

For all you know, Vash-kun, Jake-kun might just be too lazy to pick all of them out... XD

It's a nice story, Vash-kun! =D Though there are some grammar mistakes, but the length is just right if you're doing a graphical novel... wait, what's the difference between a graphical novel and a comic? ^^;

[Vash]

I'm not sure for other people, but to me, this is the difference between a graphic novel and comic:

A comic is basically a cartoonish strip of a comedic sort (thus, Comic). A graphic novel is a more serious cartoonish strip, but in a manga form.

Hope that clarified it enough...probably not, since I suck at trying to explain stuff...

Anyways, I'm planning on updating Romance of the Immortal later tonight.

(By later tonight, I mean by my time. The time here is messed up for some reason...right now, it is 10:15 in the morning for me. By tonight, the forum might already be in the next day)

Alright, due to the forums being down for most of the time I was on, it will be updated tomorrow. (It's 10:46 p.m. right now, and I'm getting tired...)

This post has been edited by Vash Stamos on Dec 17 2005, 10:47 PM

[Mercurykitten]

Eh, I'm a terrible writer no matter what anyone says, but I do like it! I don't think I'm qualified to give you a review...but I do like it!

[Starblader]

Dude, Vash, only three chapters and it's already coming along quite well

Side note to MK: I don't care what you think anyone thinks of your writing skill. From what I've read, you're a great writer, MK

[Puppet Girl]

I love this story so much, and now Kaynin is in it! YAY!

I see nothing wrong, it's looking great! ;

[Vash]

I've been quite lazy as of late...I'll most likely update within the next 2 days... (10:31 p.m., Wednesday right now...)

[Starblader]

We're looking forward to it, Vash

[Vash]

I have it finished, now I just need to finish typing it up on the computer so I can post it.

As some of you may notice, some side stories have been posted and locked. Reason is because I haven't gotten any writing down for them. They will be updated on an irregular basis...basically...whenever I feel like updating them.

[Starblader]

If I may say so, Vash, that's a lot of "some side stories" We're looking forward (or at least, I am) to seeing 'em.

[Vash]

Edited Chapters 3 and 5, due to a change in the story arc. Just a minor one, won't effect the overall story I have made.

I'll be updating pretty soon on the stories.

[Vash]

Been a while since I actually updated this.

I'm archiving a lot of the story right now. Lots of edits coming, like lowering the cast for starters.

[Vash]

More edits, and altering my story arc some. I'm going to try to get into contact with some of you for creative licenses since I don't want to feel like I'm copying down everything word for word.

Major edits:

Kuruk is being edited from a cat-person to more of a human with druid abilities. His inspiration was the Ronso race from FFX, but don't want him to just be a cat person.

Vazra Silvos Stamos, the main villain from the chainstory The Greatest Evil, might not be as evil as I first had him planned to be.

Against my original wishes of keeping everyone alive throughout the entire story, I'm going along with the deaths of certain characters, like the Black-Dranekan family, alongside with some other characters (no major characters from others, mostly just my minor characters that were involved in the story and RPs we had).

Altered times. What I mean by this is I'm going to stick with the events that happened, but I might push them further down the timeline, or pull them up. One such event I'm going along with in the story is Vash's and Kat's twins born before Seton, unlike in the RP storyline where Seton is born before Leran and Leyliana.

New opening story. I was originally going to start off with Vash's story like the topic Romance of the Immortal, but since I'm going to attempt at making it an internet graphic novel, I'm starting it all off with Miakoda so that there will be plots that they will have to figure out on their own.

New side stories. (titles coming soon)