Chapter 1- Harko-shit?, Make yourselves heard!

[Harkovast]

Now obviously, when Harkovast started out the art was a bit rough etc.
This is well known, and not the point of this topic.
This topic is because StyxD hates chapter 1 and I wonder if he has a point.
Now chapter one is not really essential per se, its more just a (hopefully) exciting opening with a battle to help us get a feel for whats going on and give us a quick run down of a few key concepts we need to know.
So technically you could rework the the start to largely remove this section.
Would that be a good thing or a bad thing?
worth the bother or a waste of time?
Let me know what you think!

[Tiberius]

I think this should go in the hall of shame.

[Frostwolf18]

i have seen alot of people rework their beginnings, it kinda took away time from the story, and with an update schedule like yours it is hard to say actually

if you updated multiple times a week i would have no problem with you reworking the beginning, so it would be easier to get new readers, but since its once a week, i would possibly wait till you finish a chapter before attempting this.

[Harkovast]

Tiberius you are right...now I need to remember how to move topics.

There we go!

Anyway, Frostwolf do you think chapter 1 is bad? Did you find it lame as you looked at it?

That's not a trick question or anything, whether you liked it or not is cool.

I just want some feed back on how people feel about it.

[Canuovea]

Hmm. Not really, I think you could keep it. Like everything done some time ago, it could do with some reworking, but... I'd rather the story goes full steam ahead as it is now.

[Frostwolf18]

i don't think chapter one is bad, though when i looked at your comic, i put it in my tabs so that i would read it later, it did interest me, but then again i am not the right person to ask these things, i read alot of comics for alot of things

[Harkovast]

Well obviously its difficult to do a proper survey of this sort of thing.
I cant really ask people who dont like it cause they aren't here (and they might well be people it will just never appeal to anyway), but its just seeing what the general opinion on the matter is.

[Harkovast]

Thats it! I am doing it!
I am changing it!
looking back...the start was really fucking wordy.
Why the hell does quinn-tain talk so much?
Do I have wizard tourettes?
Is someone paying you guys to read all that shit? What kind of hack, pretencious moron is writing this....oh wait...thats me isn't it?

Okay, well the point is this, I am now getting rid of most of chapter one (shock horror!) and cutting the word count elsewhere DRASTICALLY.
Most of what they say becomes self evident anyway, so I am cutting right back on the waffle.
The first battle was actually pretty cool...but its really redundant when I look back on it. It doesn't tell us anything we dont learn elsewhere, so now its being taken out.
Kapow!
Call me George Lucas!

[Wordweaver_three]

Oh, wow. Yeah, that's a drastic change. I do have some minor issues Mr. Luc- ah, I mean Stribley.

The hidden fang is not explained now, which I guess is okay since we do see it switchblade. The mechanical hand of Shogun also is not explained. A reader might simply assume he wears a gauntlet on that hand for some reason. So when he crushes that Tsung-Dao's face we are left to assume that he's amazingly strong as opposed to the fact that he has a magic vise on the end of his arm.

Also, check the spelling in the Muir speech about chivalry in combat.

[Harkovast]

Well I think a little bit of mystery is fun in a comic.

Which page am I looking for with the spelling mistakes? I cant find it.

[Renard]

Could it be a difference between English and "American English" spelling?

[Harkovast]

Could it be that I am flipper handed moron who cant type properly?

[Renard]

I wouldn't go that far, your spelling/grammar in the actual comic is usually pretty good.

[Harkovast]

I r ded gud a spell word annd gramor.

[Renard]

In the comic.

Sometimes your spelling and grammar on the forum is dead awful, but mostly when you're writing a particularly hateful review of something, and I assume you're really hammering away on the keyboard.