So these are the lyrics for a song. Written by yours truly. Part in Italics is the chorus.

These velvet clouds are swirling around,
I need more oxygen.
I’m going to hit the ground,
But only God knows when.
It may seem so profound,
But this is the world of men.

And even as I look from on high
I can feel the pain.
I’ve been hung out to dry
The feel in my veins
There is no time for a goodbye,
It’s rushing to my brain.

There is a sensation of fear,
A demon in my head.
My mind is too unclear,
I can’t hear what’s being said.
Something else is coming near,
What’s this feeling of dread

Chorus Repeat

Playing right into the hands of fate,
You’ve just taken the bait.

Scarlet eyes are drilling into me,
I can’t escape his gaze.
It doesn’t matter where I flee,
Cuz you got me in a daze.
You’re always chasing me,
I’m forever trapped in this maze.

Chorus Repeat

What do you think? Constructive criticism?