A peom about saria, Meh. I never was good at english

[applesaria]

The following is a peom i made up of my fan character Saria. Please tell me what you think

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She is happy,
She is Joyful,
She is all together boyful.
She is kind,
She is generous,
She annoys you round the bendus.

She is young,
She is old,
She is all together ageless.
She travel forwards,
She travels back,
She brings a smile with a bacon plack.

And if you look into her eyes
you seem to look into her soul,
But if you step into her heart
You'll feel only the cold.

For it's full of:
Rage,
Saddness,
Lonliness,
Vengence.

For she want to find the man
Who broke her heart
So she can hear him squirm
As she brakes her neck
To pay him back
To rest her sack
To release her rage
To turn the page
To unleash the final-
SILENCE!

Silence.
Silence.
For it lays forgotten.
Like ships at the bottom of the ocean.
Like a toy in a box.
For it's the only way,
ro proceed without pain.

And so she joyfully travels on.
Through time,
and light,
and space,
and matter,
unable to turn round,
without her heart giving a mounful pound.

[applesaria]

Hello all again. Things seem quite. too quite...
Oh weel. Here's a new poem sort of thing i've come up for one of my comics.
It's incomplete at the moment. More verses will come later.
Any critisims on it?

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One for the chip,
Another for the soul.
Third for the body,
the other gone before.
F I S H
Spells your FALL!

One for the gate,
Another for the frame.
Third for the essance,
The other for the brain.
F I S H
Spells it ALL!

One brings destrution,
Another is a fool.
Third's a mindless eye,
The other's going to fry.
Foolish mortal,
Your going to DIE!

One to bring the fire,
Another for the water.
Third for the electrics,
The other for the soil.
Foolish Mortals,
Your just a boil.